J.C. Belding

You walk along the deserted tracks Step by step, Breath by breath The crackling of gravel under your shoes. The clanking of each metal bar. A pattern, Never yielding to ...

I really enjoyed your rhyming scheme, especially in your 4th and 5th stanzas. To me they captured the most meaning of the entire piece. I really don't have any suggestions ...

This is a great piece! I loved how you maintained a sense of mystery from start to finish. Only one minor suggestion. You should put "wonderful" on a separate line. ...

The sun sets behind a cloud of smoke and flame. A darkness ushered in with a millennia. The sea-soaked earth The empty bowl The loaded gun. The desperate cry. The ...

Great title and imagery, but the poem's voice seems a little too commanding to go well with the topic. That said, this is an interesting interpretation of love and certainly ...

Country winds blow softly across an open field. Thin strands of fresh grass sway from side to side, Illuminated by a rich blue sky. Nature’s endless cloak, spanning beyond the ...

This has some real charm to it. Great story telling!

This is really good! Your use of description was great. Nice plot too.

I liked that your poem was short, yet conveyed a very deep sense of emotion. There's just a couple suggestions I would make. You could say "a fever" instead of ...

I loved the passion you put into this poem, especially towards the end. It might just be me, but the rhyme scheme in your opening lines didn't flow didn't seem ...

Just a house; Eight windows, Six doors, Five walls. Just a house. But to me, It was so much more. Behind that bright, Blue paint, A treasure laid. Memories. Growing, ...

Thanks for the comments. I adedd an extra staza that should take care of any confusion.

From the grasp of frost the riders came, Like earth-bound hail, descending rain. Plains of green they put to waste. Forests smoldered with unworldly haste. Seas were drained and mountains ...

I liked your ideas, and your title, but it could have been written in a more rythmic and poetic way. Using rhymes would work nicely, for example. On a good ...

Nice poem. The rythm was slightly akward in this particular style though. Other than that I enjoyed reading it, especially the ending. Good job.